This just isn’t the same as our valuable in-class discussions. But it was nice to be able to read through everyone’s specific feedback and it was just as helpful I feel. I received a lot of great suggestions that I will definitely use in revision. First off, a couple people talked about how to improve my lead. I agree that it’s kind of representative of many other articles flooding the media right now. Someone suggested I start off with my personal experience of being relocated in order to draw the reader in more. I’ll probably alter my heading as well since the story is about more than just the virus spreading to Maine. It’s also important to note that I should definitely make sure to update this article before I pass it in to make sure it’s up to date. The COVID-19 situation changes by the day and even the hour so it’s important to have an article like this reflect those changes as needed. So, I will pay attention to that as well in revision. The last thing I’ll really focus on in revision is making sure the ending is strong. Maybe I could discuss how other states have been taking action vs how Maine is slowly reacting. Then about the possible repercussions of the slow moving action in Maine.
