The first, really helpful suggestion I received in feedback was about my tone. Being stuck in my own head often times while writing, I’m unaware of how my writing sounds to others reading it. Kaelin told me that parts of my feature sounded like I was viewing the victims of email scams as idiots. I definitely don’t want to be giving off that idea to my audience. I also got suggestions that I was focusing too much on career services and not on the actual issue I was looking at. So, as I move to revision, I will adapt my story to focus more on the issue and be more sensitive to the students who’ve been victims of these often legit-seeming emails.
